hye all..

i was post some of my part and i still working on it..
please give some comment or suggestion to improve it..

thanks to all..~aziz

Hi Aziz,

Thanks for posting, you're the first (and fastest among us four) to post your part. Keep it up ;-)

About the improvements, just keep improving it in a way that best suites your working style, maybe (just a suggestion), add some intro on how people used to transport goods in the early industial revolution, as an example.

Two of my humble suggestions:

1. The first part, you could explain the purpose of the report, as it is your part to introduce to the reader what the whole essay (the combined essay) is all about.
2. Try to increase continuity (kesinambungan, in BM..) between the intro and the history.

Apart from these two, you did a very detailed description on your part. We will do a groupwork evaluation before midnite tomorrow.

Of course, we will evaluate individual posts as a group. Till then, keep up the good work! ;-)

~Lionel